Activity for Adit Kirtani
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Edit | Post #5084 | Initial revision | — | almost 5 years ago |
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A: Confusing writing in order to show how character is falling asleep - is it OK? You have to be the careful type. I am annoyed with the repetition of something in your excerpt. "She wanted to fall asleep and sleep but she couldn’t sleep because she couldn’t fall asleep even though she was very tired. " This was very annoying as you have to wrap mind around it. But, I think you ... (more) |
— | over 8 years ago |