Activity for Jasonâ€
| Type | On... | Excerpt | Status | Date |
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| Edit | Post #2323 | Initial revision | — | almost 5 years ago |
| Answer | — |
A: Please help me improve this sentence... I think you could also make it more immediate and informal by getting rid of "decade" - "It took me ten years to write this script, and now..." The length of time and the role of expectation also suggests the sentence could be made more immediate by expressing something internal, or psychological. I... (more) |
— | over 13 years ago |