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I find myself writing "Then, ..." a lot. Example: As soon as she found my letter---or rather, Kiyoshi's---she widened her slitted eyes and pressed the letter against her chest. Then, as tho...
#3: Attribution notice added
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System
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2019-12-08T06:38:56Z (almost 5 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
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alex
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2019-12-08T06:38:56Z (almost 5 years ago)
I find myself writing "Then, ..." a lot. Example: > As soon as she found my letter---or rather, _Kiyoshi's_---she widened her slitted eyes and pressed the letter against her chest. **Then, as though she were handling a delicate glass sculpture, she opened the envelope.** > > * * * > > Mr. HSC squinted his slanted eyes at me. **Then, setting down his chef hat on the counter, he said, “Look my shift’s over. How ‘bout we go to the izakaya around the corner?** > > * * * > > I answered her smile with my own. **Then, receiving her apple, I asked her,**"So \> what now?" How can I replace those thens? (For some reason, I feel that the sentences sound weird without them. Maybe I'm wrong?)
#1: Imported from external source
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System
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2017-06-16T09:25:59Z (over 7 years ago)
Original score: 5