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Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/q/30083
License name: CC BY-SA 3.0
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Someone told me that the way I write is almost like I'm writing from a template, how do I break away from this?  
I always end up with this: Saying what the person is doing in the present tense, mentioning something about surroundings, explore their past or the object/place's past.  
All I'm trying to do is set up a scene, how can I do this differently?

Example of my writing:

> Gabrielle wakes up to the sound of her phone’s loud beeping alarm. Yawning, she rolls onto her back and sits up, rubbing the crust out of her eyes. She begrudgingly pats down her nightstand until she finds her phone, quickly unlocking it and silencing the alarm. The clock says six thirty in the morning, she has to wake up early from now on, the job demands it.

Another one where I found the same problem:

> Gabrielle walks out of her apartment and feels the coldness of the outside hit her, she shivers and walks down the path to the driveway, gets into her white car and drives up to Crayla Town. It used to be something else before 2023, just a bunch of industrial, process and packaging plants and warehouses, but the flooding and proceeding mudslide irreparably damaged all of it, so they built a town over it. She can’t believe she got a job at one of the most prestigious hospitals in the entire Pacific Northwest, one of the doctors that works there, Dr. Gage is the one that hired her, he is always finding new cures to all kinds of diseases, and finds new remedies for mutations of diseases that could no longer be treated by antibiotics

Original score: 5