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I am not certain of convention. Is one of the two of these correct? Or are they equivalent? Jane said, "Let's chase the ball." Jack looked at her in disbelief. "We always chase the bal...
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conventions
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System
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2019-12-08T07:09:42Z (over 4 years ago)
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#2: Initial revision
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DPT
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2019-12-08T07:09:42Z (over 4 years ago)
I am not certain of convention. Is one of the two of these correct? Or are they equivalent? > Jane said, "Let's chase the ball." > > Jack looked at her in disbelief. "We always chase the ball, Jane. We've been chasing the ball for fifty years. Let's deflate it instead." Or, > Jane said, "Let's chase the ball." Jack looked at her in disbelief. > > "We always chase the ball, Jane. We've been chasing the ball for fifty years. Let's deflate it instead." **Edit: Another iteration of this. What if Jack has a mental response, but doesn't speak it aloud?** > Jane said, "Let's chase the ball." Jack looked at her in disbelief, thinking, _Another day chasing the ball?_ Jane suggested, "Or, we can deflate it instead?" Are Jack's thoughts worthy of their own paragraph?
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System
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2017-10-16T15:13:28Z (over 6 years ago)
Original score: 10