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Q&A How do you mix dialogue with actions of a character?

I'm not talking about if it's right to go like: "See you later, Mom!" Sierra grabbed an apple and ran out of the front door. I'm more concerned with something I remember seeing but can't remember ...

4 answers  ·  posted 6y ago by Alaerth‭  ·  last activity 5y ago by System‭

#3: Attribution notice added by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-08T07:55:30Z (almost 5 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/q/33202
License name: CC BY-SA 3.0
License URL: https://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/
#2: Initial revision by user avatar Alaerth‭ · 2019-12-08T07:55:30Z (almost 5 years ago)
I'm not talking about if it's right to go like: "See you later, Mom!" Sierra grabbed an apple and ran out of the front door.

I'm more concerned with something I remember seeing but can't remember how to do. It's where words in the character's dialogue is punctuated by actions like when, for example, a character is hitting a punching bag and says words in between hits that connect to form a sentence but between each word is a hit.

"I-"-she hit the bag-"-really"-hit-"-don't"

I don't know how to write something like that and it's kind of essential to the part of a book I'm writing.

#1: Imported from external source by user avatar System‭ · 2018-02-13T03:35:06Z (over 6 years ago)
Original score: 20