How do I handle different PoVs, at different times and places, each dealing with the same event?

In the Babysitter's Club series by Ann M Martin, there is a special collection of books. This special collection of books may have all the characters in the babysitter's club go on trip to somewhere, and each chapter is one character's point-of-view. You know you are reading from a character's POV, because the chapter's name is that character's name, handwritten to match the character's personality.

Maybe you can do a similar thing in yours.

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Double U‭

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I think you have a good premise.

It is worth asking some rhetorical questions about why you would (and would not) want to shift POV with an ensemble cast.

"good" reasons:

• Keeps the pace and tension strong. There is always something interesting happening somewhere. You have eyewitnesses at different strata of the event, and no one has a complete picture.
• The protagonists are "everymen". They are normal people in an extraordinary situation. They are all relatable and recognizable, solving problems as they come.
• The broad character motivations are clear, but each character has to resolve a series of escalating conflicts and obstacles, meanwhile their escape options are steadily reduced. The situation has inherent tension.
• There is no cartoon villain scheme to conveniently lead the plot, instead the story is a slow burn (pun intended) of "yes but…; no and…" situations which force them all to change course. An ensemble can show different reactions to the same inciting event, with each character acting in plausible ways which ultimately leads them deeper into trouble.

"bad" reasons:

• Cut the scene at dramatic moments to create "cliffhangers" and other narrative tricks to maintain suspense. (Your situation has plenty of danger, it can "earn" the tension legitimately.)
• Some will live, some will die, but the reader won't guess who. (The genre is adventure: "man against nature", not murder mystery. Again, the story can earn the tension legitimately, no need to "trick" the reader with red herrings and misdirection.)

The POV will not be confusing because each protagonist will diverge into their own "voice", and even though this is not really a character-driven story each will have a unique character motivation and experience level. Stress allows us to see the core person. On the surface, characters will all have the similar concerns about survival, but how they act under stress, how they approach problems, how quickly they abandon one plan to go to another, and how they assess their own (untested) abilities will make each character a unique person.

One way to define them is a surface personality "A" and an underlying heroic personality "B". Stress will push them from their normal "A personality" to their "B personality" which is actually a bit more interesting, but it doesn't always work to their advantage. The "A personality" is introduced first as their normal day-to-day reactions, while the "B personality" is revealed like a hero with fatal flaws that emerges as stress increases.

I'll play with your characters, but these are just suggestions:

A young housewife who lives in the foothills of the mountain behind the town and her struggle to help neighbours and herself save their houses and escape after the fires have taken hold of the area.

Housewife is a natural hero. Her B personality is to put others ahead of her own safety, and it's easy to understand how that might put her in danger. Her situation can become more complicated as she takes charge of more people than she can actually save. She would not be able to leave an elderly person behind, even when they are hostile to strangers.

Her A personality could be a contrast. Perhaps she's had previous run-ins with these neighbors. Maybe she is a little acerbic or sarcastic, or a bit aloof as she is better educated than her rural neighbors (maybe that's just how they see her).

(You could flip these personalities around. The A persona is too-nice and meek, while the B persona reveals a strong and charismatic leader. It is interesting either way.)

A man who leaves work and has to battle through the blaze to get home to his wife and children, never knowing until the end whether they are alive or dead (perhaps tying this into the first character, ie. she's his wife).

He is an anti-hero. He is doing all the wrong things for all the right reasons. His B personality rushes towards danger. Instinctively he doesn't have faith that his wife and kids will get themselves to safety, and he certainly doesn't have faith in the many authority figures telling him to turn his car around.

His A personality might be a protective husband/father who has tried to shield them. Maybe he has a long commute or lives on the road – maybe he works extra hours to move them out of an urban environment. The irony is a: Nature puts them in danger, and b: he is not there to save them.

His A and B conflicts arise every time he passes up helping someone else because he is headed in the wrong direction. He may miss crucial information because he is avoiding the main roads. Maybe he rescues people who are glad to get a ride, but not so glad when they realize they are going the wrong way.

A teenager girl who, after being sent home with her younger siblings, is left to escape with them on their own after not being able to make it home through the fires.

Teenager is a reluctant hero. She didn't ask to be the default babysitter, it means sitting around and doing nothing when she could be with friends. Her A personality might be resentful about her annoying siblings, and the burden of being the responsible one. "Just go home and wait. Ugh!" I suggest they get to the house and wait for Mom, as instructed.

Her B personality, her hero aspect, is more than just overcoming teenage self-centeredness. As a child she did as she was told, but she's now old enough that "because mom said so" isn't the only reason. While she is curious to see the fire herself, she also knows she has to tell her brother "no" because he would go do something dumb. Little Bro is still a child, but Teen Girl is neither a child or an adult. The fire seems to be getting closer, and Mom still hasn't returned. Now what?

Remember there are 3 reactions to stress: fight, flight and freeze. A very normal reaction is to do nothing, especially for people who have never had authority. Baby animals are left under a tree or hidden in tall grass, their defense is to do nothing and let danger pass them by (sometimes while Mom leads danger away). What Teen Girl has to decide is when to stay put (like a child) and when to take action (like an adult). They stay at the house too long until access is cut off, but can she get them over rough ground to the highway? Her younger siblings are simultaneously depending on her ingenuity and self-reliance, and also threatening to tell mom on her, giving her child/adult struggle a literal voice.

A young man and his co-workers who work in the telegraph office and struggle throughout the fires to spread possibly life saving information.

This guy is not a character, he is an infodump – but lets force the same heroic struggle onto him. (I do not know the historic incident, so pardon the melodrama, it is just an example.)

He is what I call a Science Hero. He may at first have a rigid (narrow) understanding of his tools and how they should be used (during an emergency or otherwise). His heroism is having the vision that his tools can be used in a whole new way. He may also have a better sense of the terrain than his superiors but lacks authority to persuade them, or his actions are in someway antithetical to his job (telegraph offices are to turn a profit, not coordinate rescues). The conflict may not be a power struggle at all, just a race to coordinate a system of reliable information.

This leads to a showdown within his office, where he breaks the rules, oversteps his authority, or otherwise jeopardizes his job – potentially removing him from his position to help others. At any rate you still have an A personality to start, and heroic B personality that emerges under stress. He may be too eager to help and tell people the wrong thing, thus his information can hurt people before he gets it under control.

The important trick is to make everyone's heroic personality a double-edged sword. These people are not professional heroes. Their B personalities are untested, and they will make big mistakes by doubting their instincts and also through inexperience.

When you frame each protagonist as a different "heroic archetype", and understand their "heroic paths" as separate but equal journeys, each character's voice and story beats will make more sense, both to you and the reader.

What about the passing of time as what each of these characters are going through is all happening at the same time?

Chronological time is presumed to move forward everywhere in the story world, even when we are following other characters. Use the shift in POV to skip over things that are dramatically unimportant, such as straight travel or a long section without a change in character or conflict. When you return, the reader will assume at least the same amount of time has advanced for these characters too, unless you explicitly say otherwise. Give a timely in-scene cue as you would in any scene, especially if the time gaps are inconsistent or need to overlap.

See more of this answer here: https://writing.stackexchange.com/a/39554/23253

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wetcircuit‭

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Can you give it a frame story that gives a coherent overarching narrative that these all stories fit into organically? For instance, the POV characters all meet up in a temporary refuge after the fire, and share their experiences? Or, conversely, a reporter comes to interview them, years later?

Although the frame story might just serve to structure the main stories, it could also interact with them. For example, perhaps the teenage girl becomes your main narrator. She meets the housewife early on, when they both make it to a church being used as shelter for people displaced by the fire. The girl keeps searching for her mother. Later, at another shelter, she meets the housewife's husband. She is able to put the pieces together, and reunite that couple. When they make it back to the first shelter, the girl's mother is also there.

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Chris Sunami‭

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how do I switch between these characters without it being jarring for the reader?

Short answer: you don't. There will always be a moment, when switching from a PoV to another, when the reader will feel his connection with the character, hence his suspension of disbelief, interrupt momentarily. When the PoV changes, the reader is reminded that he's not in the head of the character - and after all, he's just reading.

So it will be jarring, at least a bit. Now this isn't a problem: a lot of authors do multiple PoVs fine. A famous - and maybe overused - example is George R. Martin in the Song of ice and fire series. In every book there are multiple PoVs divided by chapters. Some events are then narrated from different viewpoints, giving the reader different insights.

Now, from a minimizing-the-jarringness standpoint, there are a few things to take care of.

Do I just write a few chapters on one character then switch to another for a few chapters, and then another again? What about the passing of time as what each of these characters are going through is all happening at the same time?

Both ways are viable, having their pros and cons.

A different PoV for each x chapters (with x being between 1 and 3, roughly):

• Pro: You get to show what's happening everywhere roughly at the same time
• Pro: It can suit you well, since you can interleave stories neatly (for example, passing from a chapter with the woman to her husband). The idea should be that each PoV will "pass the baton" to the following one.
• Con: You are constantly switching back and forth, so the jarring effect is maximized unless you doing it well.
• Pro/Con: you are also maximizing suspence, since no one of those singular stories reaches its end before the others.

Stick to a PoV and switch to another once it's finished:

• Pro: You minimize jarring, giving a coherent PoV until needed
• Pro: Each PoV is, in a way, a sufficient, self-contained story about the bush fires
• Con: PoVs may feel "disconnected" one from the other, apart from the common theme
• Con: You have to "rewind time" each time you switch to a new PoV

As I said there are both viable. It depends on what you're aiming to get. The first method tries to build a single story out of 4 PoV, where the second builds up a collection of short stories.

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Liquid‭

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Yes, just do a different POV every chapter (or two if you must).

You can handle the transition with chapter titles and sub-titles, or an identical opening on a particular day: Pick something like a Saint's day, there are several for any date. This doesn't have to be a religious reference exactly, it can also be the anniversary of something being touted on television. Or somebody on a morning show mentions it is "St. Aurelius" day (July 20).

In any case, whether directly or indirectly, the Chapter opens like

Linda Smith
July 20, 1983, 8:00 AM

And all that changes is the name at the top of each chapter. Or, like I said, use just the name, and in the opening line, repeat the opening.

Linda turned on the TV to catch the weather report, and waited a minute. The weather girl came on, "It should be a clear Saturday morning, but we could use some rain today. We have reports of brush fires in the south, we'll have some video this hour, I am told ... "

The point is, every chapter, for each character, opens with the same exact line from the same weather girl. You don't have to give an exact date or time, readers will pick up on the fact that this is all the identical time. Each character can react differently to this, and you can cut off the weather girl after the first opening with a thought or action from the character.

LINDA: Is that girl really a meteorologist?

MIKE: Mike's phone rang, and he muted the TV to answer it.

You can vary everything, but somehow get the first sentence of the weather girl in, and the time is established.

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Amadeus‭

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