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Q&A Should I signal completion of a decision point in an interactive novel?

In my visual novel (an interactive, narrative-based video-game), I have a detective character who decides whether he believes interviewees controlled by the player. The detective doesn't explain ...

1 answer  ·  posted 5y ago by wetcircuit‭  ·  last activity 5y ago by System‭

#3: Attribution notice added by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-08T11:01:32Z (almost 5 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/q/42617
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#2: Initial revision by user avatar wetcircuit‭ · 2019-12-08T11:01:32Z (almost 5 years ago)
In my _visual novel_ (an interactive, narrative-based video-game), I have a detective character who decides whether he believes interviewees controlled by the player.

The detective doesn't explain his reason but it's buried in the choices. The reader can't anticipate which choice-combination will convince him (choices might reveal a clue unwittingly, said clue becoming important later). The reader can make a suspect helpful or aggressive, but they won't know what makes the detective sympathetic or suspicious. The player's choices therefore impact the story, but only indirectly.

It feels like I need to emphasize that SOMEthing has been determined by the interview, but the detective is sly and does not always reveal his thoughts to the suspects/interviewees. I have the option to signal the reader non-diegetically that the detective has made a determination. In other words, I can signal the mystery's progress outside of the on-going dialog and other in-story elements (for example, Telltale's "Mr Toad will remember this").

The downside is that this means the story is sort of letting out a WHOOP WHOOP but not explaining it. **It's telling, not showing**.

I can integrate it diegetically (in-story), as a "power" of the detective (it is an occult world) that he invokes at the end of every interview, so it could be integrated thematically, but it's still a gimmick that draws attention to itself without having a clear pay-off. The detective has determined something, but the reader isn't sure what.

The signals are not necessary to "win." in fact without the signal the reader probably wouldn't realize the story has passed judgement. It is purely to draw attention to itself. The flaws of the interview may or may not be explained, depending on later branches to the story.

**Is a non-diegetic signal from the story engine goofy and distracting (breaking the 4th wall)? Or does it re-enforce the idea that choices matter**, even if you have to trust me that the choices matter?

_EDIT: It's probably no surprise that my Interactive Fiction community says yes, the signal is a good idea but should be vague and subtle. The comments and answer on WritingSE says no, it should just emerge through the story._

#1: Imported from external source by user avatar System‭ · 2019-02-25T18:27:36Z (over 5 years ago)
Original score: 1