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Q&A How to write a vulnerable moment without it seeming cliche or mushy?

So, I have a kinda loudmouthed character who's always the first to fight and first to go on the offensive (This is a fantasy, so she fights a lot.) But, later in the story, she comes across someone...

3 answers  ·  posted 5y ago by Kale Slade‭  ·  last activity 5y ago by System‭

#3: Attribution notice added by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-08T12:01:48Z (almost 5 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/q/45549
License name: CC BY-SA 3.0
License URL: https://creativecommons.org/licenses/by-sa/3.0/
#2: Initial revision by user avatar Kale Slade‭ · 2019-12-08T12:01:48Z (almost 5 years ago)
So, I have a kinda loudmouthed character who's always the first to fight and first to go on the offensive (This is a fantasy, so she fights a lot.) But, later in the story, she comes across someone she truly fears, and finds that she must fight that person in order to free the townspeople of an oppressive ruler.

Thing is, I want her to have a moment when she's weeping on her bed, and the MC/her love interest comes to comfort her. Then again, I don't want (insert group here) screaming in criticism and tearing that scene apart.

My question is: How do I show her vulnerability, and have a comforting moment, and tease the romance, without being overly cliche or overboard?

#1: Imported from external source by user avatar System‭ · 2019-05-29T18:15:37Z (over 5 years ago)
Original score: 15