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Q&A Breaking dialogue with actions from another character

This can get... confusing, which is why I tend to avoid it, but sometimes, I really want it there. “What?!” [said Character B.] I laughed, giving her a minute to process my words. “You’re get...

2 answers  ·  posted 5y ago by spoopydumpling‭  ·  last activity 5y ago by System‭

#3: Attribution notice added by user avatar System‭ · 2019-12-08T12:10:44Z (about 5 years ago)
Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/q/45943
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#2: Initial revision by user avatar spoopydumpling‭ · 2019-12-08T12:10:44Z (about 5 years ago)
This can get... confusing, which is why I tend to avoid it, but sometimes, I really want it there.

> “What?!” [said Character B.] I laughed, giving her a minute to process my words. “You’re getting married? I never thought I’d see the day!”

I want the pause between the dialogue. I suppose I can put an ellipsis, but I wanted action to break the dialogue. However, the action is from Character A which can make it confusing.

The scene is a back-to-back dialogue since they’re conversing. This has also happened in another story of mine, and sometimes the action break is too long, so I feel like I should put the action in a different paragraph, but the same person who was previously speaking would be speaking again. **I’m just unsure about the correct formatting.** I wasn’t able to find much explanation on Google.

#1: Imported from external source by user avatar System‭ · 2019-06-12T18:26:34Z (over 5 years ago)
Original score: 7