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In one chapter, the PoV character meets up with her sister. Her sister is supposed to be fairly stuck-up and thinks she's a complete lowlife, so she talks down to her the whole time. I have the Po...
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In one chapter, the PoV character meets up with her sister. Her sister is supposed to be fairly stuck-up and thinks she's a complete lowlife, so she talks down to her the whole time. I have the PoV character mention her sister's condescending tone, but it feels heavy-handed to me. If I want to make the sister sound condescending, is there a specific sentence structure/word choice I should use?