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Source: https://writers.stackexchange.com/q/7874
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So straight to it, I don't write very long pieces. Usually poetry or flash fiction and a smattering of short stories whenever it needs to be longer, though I have aspirations (mostly just dreams) of expanding these to more industry accessible (profitable) media. What I find is that at this length the line between authoring the piece and reading it is hard to define (especially since you are doing both) and the metaphorical, literary screws are really tightened so you can see the stress fractures in a piece. What I mean is you are very aware of how it is going to read and whether it sounds like you want it to on the page. I'm not doing a good job of this, example.

> The hallway sounds of bells with each door closing.

Sounds great, right? Suggestive, short, and sweet. But, after some thought I've realized it isn't the right tense in the piece.

> The hallway sounded of bells as each door closed.

Which, also isn't bad, but sounds different with the extra syllable mucking up the rhythm and hard consonants stomping around it. But it's too vague! This story is solely about SEVENTEEN different hallways (I know, a stupid idea, but I didn't choose the best example so bare with me) and it's confusing to the reader! So, we get

> Quantum Hope Devourer sounded of bells as each door closed.

And now you think, well that's just stupid, It doesn't make any sense! I can't believe I wasted my time reading this, I thought you were making a point. You just changed everything about the sentence, how can you possibly expect it to keep the same shape and sound when you change it so much?!

Which is MY point, how can I possibly hope to keep the things I like about a piece as everything changes. This is why I don't like revising work. But everything needs to be revised. Nothing is perfect from the start, I know this and am stuck in this dilema.

And here, you might say to yourself, but he hasn't even mentioned voice OR spontaneity once in his question! A good point and I thank you for paying such close attention, but you can see where this is going. Voice is all about phrasing words so it sounds one way and spontaneity is all about imaginative word choice so it sounds another way and everything is always about how it reads. So then the revision process forces these things to a backseat in the creative process because I can't focus on them when they mean so much to me.

I understand how to fix plot structure, story problems, literary vices and all that through revision, but not this stuff. How can I approach editing consistently so I don't feel like I'm removing all the good parts in my work? Should it even be a concern? Is it even doable?

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