How would I improve the language and structure of this farewell email? [closed]

I will shortly be moving to another a role within the same organisation and was wondering if you could advise on how I could improve the language and structure of this farewell email. It seems a bit drawn out at the moment and I'd like it to retain the sincerity yet exude a sharpness that will create future opportunities by extending bridges.

Dear all,

As many of you know, today is my last day with compliance. Through this farewell email, I wanted to thank you for your continued support and guidance. During the last six months, I have had the privilege to work with genuinely talented people like yourself, who have helped me grow both personally and professionally.

With my first rotation drawing to a close, I look back with pleasure on everything that we have accomplished together. I only hope that I find in my new role a fraction of the encouragement, gratitude and opportunities that I have found here.

I have really enjoyed my time and will miss working with you all. I owe you an enormous debt of gratitude and I wish each one of you, the very best in all your future endeavours, both professional and personal. Thanks again for everything.

Regards

posted almost 11 years ago

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