How can I get rid of the "things" in the following passage?
“Good. You've done your homework.” The girl turned around and started inspecting a decaying tree, as if checking its health. “Funny, isn't? How nature can make us do things that don't benefit our survival. Things that are just a complete waste of time and energy. Or even worst, things that may hurt us—or those around us. Why is that? It doesn't make sense at all.”
I have no idea why things turned out like this (damn, that word again). And I'm not sure how to solve it. Any suggestions?
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The only one which actually seems repetitious is the third one; the first one is perfect and the second is a deliberate sentence-fragment echo. I literally didn't notice them.
for the third:
Or even worse, we end up doing something that may hurt us — or those around us.
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