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In one scene, I have a conversation between three characters: A, B and C. A's son and B are involved in something illegal. C isn't aware, and since A and B aren't entirely sure she can be trusted, they'd like to keep it that way.

The scene is being described from C's PoV (3rd person). C is not used to being deceived, so she won't be suspicious right away.

How can I hint to the reader that A and B are uncomfortable with C's presence and are leaving out information, without C noticing (until later)?

(So far, the best I've been able to do is have B stop himself in mid-sentence: "I don't know. D didn't- I haven't seen him since last week." But on its own, it's not strong enough.)

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