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Nope, it's fine. The repetition and sentence structure give it a dreamy feel, which I think is exactly what you want for that moment. "The" is fairly invisible here. (P.S. You had "Eri kissed his ...
Once you publish something, it's out beyond your grasp. I strongly recommend against publishing a piece that you feel still has work to be done on. Self-publishing a novel that still needs editin...
I would see these as transitions, bits which help move the reader smoothly from one thought (spread over one or several paragraphs) to the next. I think presenting it that way will give your stude...
If you can live with it not being after the word, my dead-trees encyclopedia which was written long before web 2.0 was all the hype uses something like the form ►someword (that's U+25BA from the Ge...
Started a nuclear disaster, potential for otherworldly elements — I'd say he's a fanatic trying to bring about the end of the world so that aliens will swoop down and rescue him. No seriously. The...
Present tense in some different formatting (I like italics) if those are Eri's thoughts presented as interior dialogue. Past tense if that's her thought in narration. As presented above, you have ...
You need the comma because you are addressing the person. "Did you feel the earthquake last night?" is a complete sentence. Adding "Eri" is a kind of one-word clause. You need the comma to separate...
In my experience there are two main types of blogs out there, topic-focused and person-focused. You're describing the latter. Person-focused blogs, which cover a range of topics and styles with t...
I use the Gollum wiki. It works well for me. There's no database, just wiki-formatted text files. It uses the git version control system so you have a history of every change you make (and you don'...
My suggestion would be to find an agent. The agent will have the experience, knowledge, and connections which you don't, and may be able to steer you towards publishing houses which are more gener...
Different schools have different methods (for example, some insist that the last line of the introduction must be the thesis statement), but I learned that a "conclusion" is essentially reiterating...
With help from a coworker I was able to fix this by adding the following to the FO stylesheet: <xsl:template match="classname"> <fo:inline hyphenate="false"> <xsl:call-templat...
This is a Your Mileage May Vary question; there is no one right answer. My suggestion would be to go through the draft once more, fix what you think needs fixing, and then find a beta reader and/or...
The answer is: It's up to you, and it depends on the context. I normally wouldn't chime in on academic writing, since we have experts here in APA and MLA, but this question seems to involve none of...
A and B meet. A and B fall in love. Optional: A and B enjoy snugglebunnies. Obstacle gets between A and B. A and/or B overcome obstacle. Omnia vincit amor. (since it was requested that I turn this...
At the end, after the story is finished, in a section called "Author's notes." You can list your thanks, your sources, and any other comments you want to make.
A "draft" is one complete pass-through of writing a piece (an article, blog post, short story, novella, novel, etc.). Your "first draft" is generally considered the first time you commit the enti...
Either underscores or asterisks around the words, I would think. All-caps run the risk of being printed in all-caps.
There is no universal answer to this, as there are many ways of indicating emphasis in plain text. Your best bet is to read the submission guidelines of the publication that you're submitting to, a...
You haven't mentioned the style guide you're following; different guides have different rules. For Turabian / Chicago Style, the rules applicable are: A single-author entry precedes a multia...
Yes, you can absolutely use quotes to indicate sarcasm (or irony). If the sarcasm is in dialogue, you can write it exactly as in Hobbes's example. If you want to have the additional stage business...
Change something else in the sentence. A fighter is someone who fights for the pleasure of spectators, against his or her own safety. A fighter is someone who fights for the pleas...
Book titles are usually placed within quotes or italicized, in order to set them apart. Which one you use is a matter of style. Assuming that your publisher has no style preference (some do), you...
I think italics would be perfect. It makes total sense that the protagonist is recalling what someone else said — it's sort of an in-line flashback. Otherwise, how are you going to indicate that it...
I'm of the same mind as SF. Is the protagonist the killer or the good guys? If it's a crime novel, tone down the blood spatter and have more in the precinct. Lengthen the scenes where the detecti...
