How to suddenly introduce a scary character, but include description?
I have a scene in my story where the main character (the story is told from his POV) opens a door and there is a monster in the room.
I want a sudden introduction, to show how shocked the character is, but I also want to give a description of the monster, or at least give an idea of what it looks like.
How can I achieve both in the same paragraph?
The character was not expecting the monster, because monsters should not exist in his world.
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The first time the character sees the monster, he's only going to get a few basic details. Christ, that thing is huge! It's green! and the teeth!
After he's ducked out of the way and looked back over his shoulder, then he's going to notice the matted fur, the slitted yellow eyes, the cracked horns, the sulphurous breath, et cetera. So you describe it through the POV of the character and his terror.
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